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Post by Interrobang Pie on May 16, 2009 7:39:16 GMT 10
The new comic melarky has arrived! *epic fanfare*  Any better than BNI? C+C in general? |
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Post by Tené on May 16, 2009 7:47:42 GMT 10
It seems a bit... lacklustre. Perhaps it's because one page is not enough to really introduce any idea of character or plot. If you intend to focus it around those, best create more pages before showing them off to anyone. If you're going for humour, you frankly need to be funnier. And there's nothing really going on. I'd really expect to see some kind of link between the title and the comic.
Speech bubbles would be a plus, too. Coloured text is enough to identify who's saying what, but at some point it's going to become hard to read.
On the plus side, the sprite work is good.
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Post by somebody probably on May 16, 2009 7:57:22 GMT 10
Try giving the text a stroke effect and use a more appropriate font. Readability and presentation is good.
And yeah, it's not really very funny, it seems very forced.
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Post by Sergeant Dull on May 16, 2009 8:03:12 GMT 10
That's the kind of humour a seasoned comic author would use in the middle of his comic series, roughly the 50 something-th issue, and he's making fun of how his humour banks are running dry.
You ran dry on the first comic man.
That's a problem.
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Post by somebody probably on May 16, 2009 8:19:29 GMT 10
That's the kind of humour a seasoned comic author would use in the middle of his comic series, roughly the 50 something-th issue, and he's making fun of how his humour banks are running dry. You ran dry on the first comic man. That's a problem. Also this, I wasn't sure how to put it, but this post sums that thought up quite nicely. |
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Post by Interrobang Pie on May 16, 2009 8:56:30 GMT 10
Indeed.
Yeah, I shouldn't have used that joke then. Maybe when I get some better jokes, I'll come back.
But for now: FUNKAY!
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Post by Rhinoce Breakdancerus on May 16, 2009 9:02:22 GMT 10
Ooh, a randomness comic, haven't seen this before.  I had to read over one for a review comic on SJ and it was over sixty pages of suck. Don't let this happen to you. Get a real plot. Write it so that it just doesn't appeal to five people on this forum. And don't think making random references to video games and the internet is automatically going to make you funny. And most of all, don't make sixty pages of suck and request somebody on a review comic to read over it, especially me. |
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Post by stupid hos is my enemy on May 16, 2009 10:27:33 GMT 10
I cannot agree with Roby more. There is a simple mathematical equation for this shit. Random =/= Funny. Ever.
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Post by D00D64: AM I GONE OR WHAT on May 16, 2009 10:45:48 GMT 10
One word: BLAND.
And why the hell is Syph acting like that in the third panel? It totally doesn't match with the situation. Also, hit hand looks awkward in panel 4.
AND FOR THE LOVE OF CRAP GETS SOME DAMN BUBBLES
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Post by Breaker on May 16, 2009 11:09:27 GMT 10
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Post by Interrobang Pie on May 16, 2009 18:04:00 GMT 10
Kk, which one of these is better?  |
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Post by Oberstleutnant Insipid on May 16, 2009 20:48:13 GMT 10
The green on all the bubbles is too bright, and the outline is too thick.
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Post by D00D64: AM I GONE OR WHAT on May 16, 2009 22:29:44 GMT 10
FATFATTYFATFATFATTYFATFAT
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Post by iBishyT on May 17, 2009 2:16:23 GMT 10
Holy KIPPERS, that alien's a tripod! *shot*
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Post by The Pletch on May 17, 2009 2:41:04 GMT 10
Not even Toejam could make this comic funny.
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